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Genesis (collaboration)

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the world unseen by eyes
is the source where our world
is patterned and derived.


The spirit, speaking, swirled
Love-born light held its breath
And matter was revealed.

thus from the cosmic creche
the star's precursor seeped;
hydrogen spanned the depths.


Forth from the depths there leaped
Out of a leafing dark
Compaction that long slept.

gravity fusion sparked,
lighting the fledgling suns;
the path to life embarked.


Now, beasts, fresh-sprung buds, men, feathers, fins
Each day tumble new from dawn's gold hands.
A poem on cosmic origins written in partnership with =deinktvis (it's also posted in his gallery here: deinktvis.deviantart.com/art/g… ). We alternated stanzas (the verses in italics are his).

The form is a diciotto (deinktvis has written a tutorial on it here: deinktvis.deviantart.com/art/d… )

Enjoy! :)

P. S. The concluding couplet is the result of this piece of Dylan Thomas ricocheting around my insides: www.youtube.com/watch?v=uFbyq2cZHgE

Peace.
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alapip's avatar
'we newly recognize quantum cosmic awareness'

loving the subject matter [no pun intended]
and the evolved [and evolving] integrated intelligence
which springs from its colossal depth 

we now purposely [supposedly] evolve ourselves
we must love our human [homo-sapiens-sapiens]
  selves as a species if we are to further succeed

many of us hate our sinful selves and seek a biblical ending
they are the entities who [faithfully] have not evolved in awareness
where we are entities who [in realism] continue the evolution

Who here actually seems to represent their artificial Satan?
We... or Their Unaware Selves?

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[I tend to continue the thought of a newly read poem]
[You may note, Daniel, that I care not for particular poetic form
having focused only on the intended message - basically my agenda]
:shrug: pip